I've read a bunch of stories on this forum. This one was particularly good because of its pace. It set up quickly and executed. The characters were believable and consistent. Lastly, it made for a damn fine rape scene.
My only advise/comment is that the writing style (very intelligent with good prose) clashes with the dialog of the main character (gruff and corse). This normally isn't a problem if you avoid writing in the first person. This way, the reader can better differentiate between the story teller and the story's characters.
If you like writing in the first person (I do too), then just sync the stlyle to the character.
Otherwise, this is my favorite thus far.
MKP4
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