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Old 10-09-2009, 11:39 AM   #2
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Well now that was a great story.

The only thing I would say is that you only capitalise proper nouns such as people's names and places, nouns like girl, geek etc do not need to be capitalised, other then that, very well written.

And I love the twist ending, very clever

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