Nice.
Since English is not your native language, I can "hear" your accent as you speak to her, threaten her, command her. A really great effect. I can just imagine that this is some young hot-shot businesswoman who controls her boyfriends, now in the depraved hands of a newly arrived, possibly illegal, immigrant.
If any females join in, great! Otherwise, keep going! If you finish it yourself, maybe it could be patched together and put in the story section.
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